Persuasive writing

Room 7
Seanior
Halsey drive 106
Lynfield
Auckland

Dear Mrs Davies crook,

My name is William Lee. School is boring because I'm bad at everything. I want school to be all about math because every kid can be smart than usual. Did you know that people can answer really quickly.

People can be friendly because the take turns on the Chromebooks also one person can do it for 20 minutes and the other person can do the rest.

People can help other people because they can struggle.

Strategies can help by answering the question quicker.

Also you can think so you can be smart.

Thank you for reading my letter. I hope you change what I said.

Your sincerely
William.

Purple Group

Mrs Palliser

rainbow sheen,    slowly, side to side, gently

softly gracefully dance transparent

translucent sphere rotated

rushing river of bubbles connected

the bubbles clumped together like a family hugging

slimy like a snail dancing like a ballerina

swirly lines of rainbow through them

soft and cold

gooey and wet

twirl up to the ceiling like a spiral

quiet, peaceful, float up like a balloon, twirl up like a snake

twirl up like a spiral staircase,

as round as an orange,

bunched together like popcorn bunch of grapes

Mrs Palliser

Pop. Pop. Pop. The round rainbow spheres rotated like the world was spinning. Some of the bubbles clumped together like a family hugging. Some were tiny and others were huge. They gracefully danced like a ballerina. Soft yellow and pink colours swirled around through the transparent bubbles. Shiny, they glowed like stars in the night sky.

Gooey, soapy mixture landed on my small fingers. It was as light as a feather. Pop. Ouch! One bubble dropped in my eye and it was burning. I held my hand over my eye to stop other bubbles going in. I reached up to get another one. It was as sticky as honey and foamy like dishwashing water.

Vanessa

Pop!Pop!Pop!The transparent rainbow spheres where as shiny as a window just cleaned. When Ms Palliser blew the bubbles I saw bubbles what were hugging each other like a family. The size of the bubbles were huge and tiny. Some of the bubbles were flying up and down. The huge ones popped first & the tiny ones popped last.

William

Pop! The transparent spheres danced around the classroom.  The bubble conjunct together.  The rainbow transparent sphere land on the ground softly. Thubbles were soft and cold.  

Mishti

Bubbles in Room 7

!pop!,pop!,pop!,!pop! As Mrs Palliser blew the rainbow spheres everyone was discovering the possibilities of them. They were looking like spheres with rainbow swirls in them. When they were bunched together they looked as if they were transparent grapes. Smaller bunches of them looked like the popcorn we find at the cinemas. Once Mrs Palliser blew the bubbles we all realised that no one could resist to pop them or just say a word about them. When they were gliding in the sky they came in a lot of different sizes, some were huge and  some were tiny but they were all looking the same. Each one was filled with elegance.

The bubbles were very very soft and foamy. They also felt a little bit wet and they were definitely cold.        

Meera

pop,pop they are everywhere! as the rainbow sphere

dances gracefully through the air. There were some that were clumped together like a the big family hugging and some were like tiny little wet balls. The bubbles were SO shiny they had colours in them ,the colours were pink ,green and yellow .When miss Palliser blew the bubbles we just had pop them !

Sticky!! as the soapy bubbles pop on my hands

    

Ruyi

The bubbles drop everywhere in the sky like an raindrop.The bubbles look like the a

Slowly and gracefully the round rainbow spheres float around Room 7 .The bubbles move slowly side to side making a rushing river of bubbles.The bubbles stick  together and then look like a family hugging .Their shiny light brightened up the whole room.

Aida

Pop. Pop. Pop. bubbles gracefully swirled and danced. They were  colour of the rainbow sphere.The soft colours were Red,Orange,Yellow,Green  

Umamah

Transparent floating in the air. so shiny glowing it’s like a rainbow floating  across the the world the bubbles are twirling like chips they have blue pink dark green and soft yellow those colors were in the pretty bubbles some bubbles are huge and Ginormous and some are tiny winy they feel like oil

ADITYA

spheres,spheres spheres all around, spheres over there, spheres over here. oily spheres everywhere . there shiny glow gave me a delight, but there oily splats gave me a fright. they went up to the ceiling or down to the floor, then wait for it...POP! they elegantly floated across the room like a hippopotamus swimming in the water.

I reached to the sky to

First Semester Goals 2016 Name: William                                                           Year: 4

Curriculum Goals My goal is to read properly. I will achieve this by reading 1 book every day for 10 minutes. My goal is to spell right. I will achieve this by spelling every wednesday for 25 minutes.

Key Competency Goal Make sensible behaviour choices. I will not hit people with my word search book or ruler.

Personal Goal My goal is to write better . I will achieve this by writing on Thursday for half an hour.

Teacher Comment Very good William. I’m impressed.